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Post by MARIK SWIFT on Apr 19, 2012 15:58:01 GMT -6
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NAME & ALIAS ■ Marik swift | Knight of Justice AGE ■ Twenty-Two RACE ■ Human GENDER ■ Male SEXUALITY ■ Heterosexual HEARTH ■ Ilusia | West Blue PROFFESION ■ World Government | Gorosei
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POSITIVE TRAITS
[/i] ♥ Strong sense of justice [/ul] NEGATIVE TRAITS[/i] ♥ Arrogant ♥ Merciless ♥ Ignorant at times ♥ Egotistic ♥ Sadistic [/ul] LIKES[/i] ♥ Toying with others ♥ Winning ♥ Killing [/ul] DISLIKES[/size][/blockquote][/blockquote] [atrb=width,290,true][atrb=border,0,true] [style=line-height: 15px; border-bottom: 1px solid; font-size: 14px; font-family: ms gothic;text-transform: uppercase; letter-spacing: 5px; color: e2e2e2;]ABILITIES AND WEAPONS [style=line-height: 13px; font-size: 10px; font-family: tahoma; margin-left: 45px; margin-bottom: 10px; margin-top: 10px; margin-right: 10px;] |
ABILITIES MAJOR & MINOR ■ Your characters basic characteristic, majors define you, while minors effect you at a lesser value. link.
WEAPONS/ITEMS
[/b] Marik carries with him, at both sides of his waste, a dual pair of black Beretta 92 pistols that fire at 381 m/s (1,250 ft/s). ■ Rebel Blade The Rebel Blade is Marik's personal sword. The Rebel Blade is mainly for the purpose of stabbing and can be consider a fencing sword as it is even longer than a nodaichi, having a length of seven feet with a one-foot-three-inches handle. In spite of its length, it is in fact very light enable for quick movements and maneuvering when using it. In accompany to its length the best future of the sword is that Marik has modified the sword to enable it to shoot bullets from its blade. The bullets are stored in the blade and can be effectively fired by pressing a mechanism on the blade, after which the bullets fire at 381 m/s (1,250 ft/s). Image[/justify][/ul] [atrb=width,290,true][atrb=border,0,true] [style=line-height: 15px; border-bottom: 1px solid; font-size: 14px; font-family: ms gothic;text-transform: uppercase; letter-spacing: 5px; color: e2e2e2;]extra details [style=line-height: 13px; font-size: 10px; font-family: tahoma; margin-left: 45px; margin-bottom: 10px; margin-top: 10px; margin-right: 10px;] |
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nickname; marikswift contact: lightening_213@hotmail.com face claim: CODE GEASS; lelouch vi britannia
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Post by MARIK SWIFT on Apr 19, 2012 16:28:10 GMT -6
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ABILITY NAME: name of your devil fruit, haki, or super-human. ABILITY TYPE: devil fruit, haki, super-human ability. ABILITY LEVEL: strength of ability, based on type. ABILITY DESCRIPTION: general description of your ability.
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MIKEY
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Post by MIKEY on Apr 20, 2012 5:20:45 GMT -6
Howdy, I'll be modding your application today.
First things first, I want more of a cooldown on your Pride ability. You're essentially turning into frickin' superman for three posts. It should be once a thread, and that's simply how it is.
As for the second ability, I'm just getting the no feeling to be honest with you. There are some abilities you'll never have seen before, same with fighting styles. Therefore, as good a psychologist as you may be, you'd have no feasible reason to predict attacks. That's a flat out no for me right there. You're going to have to heavily edit that ability before it becomes anywhere near acceptable for me. I'm denying this for the moment.
just a small note, we only accept simple weapons and items directly, unless your applying and buying purchases for your weapon as you do so as such as higher calibur, less recoil, etc. both your guns are fine in calibur, the first ones dont need to be touched, however pacifista technogly would only be be avaible to purchase as a MARINE or Gorosei (as your applying for). I'd remove the part about the lazer among other things until you have the proper beli to submit as a custom weapon.
lastly, your sword appears alright, unorthdox size, but like above, weapons can not be unique like that right off the bat, you need to submit them as custom weapons so the staff can price them. also sea stone addons to any weapon costs 200 M, cant simply begin with it. otherwise everyone would, and sell it for alot of beli.
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COLONEL
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Post by COLONEL on Apr 20, 2012 23:21:29 GMT -6
Alright, I see you have fixed alot of stuff since this morning but there is still the problem which involves your techs. It's only a minor problem so, once we hatch this out, your be good to go.
For Pride, I think it should last only for two post seeing how Haste is your minor, not major. Once you get some berri, you can upgrade it. As such, the ability can only double your speed, not make you faster then your opponent due to the fact, your opponent could have superhuman speed. Also your ability needs an effect duration and cool down phrase.
Counter Strike, again, your minor is haste, therefore your speed attacks won't be as great compare to those who major is haste. Also, it seems that this attack grants you superhuman speed and for that, you have to purchase and again, you can only double your speed.
Not gonna say anything bout the weapons cause BJ has that one covered in the cbox.
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COLONEL
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Post by COLONEL on Apr 20, 2012 23:31:14 GMT -6
Since you have no abilities, and you fixed the guns. Approved 1|1.
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