Milliardo Von Treize

[Andri Kaiser III]

Marine

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Milliardo Von Treize

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✘ SEX: Male
✘ RACE: Half- Fishman/Human
✘ STATUS: Single
✘ POSITON: Marine
✘ MAJOR: Haste, Heart
✘ MINOR: Endurance, Intelligence
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Black hair & Royal blue eyes.

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[/b] The young Marine Milliardo stands at a mere five-inches and four-feet his hair was rich black, with subtle blue strands in the mix. Despite his petite appearance from not only a far, but in close range he does benefit from his fishman blood thus giving him natural born strength over that of a normal man, though his arm strength is well overdue praising his legs are where the effort really shows out, and does these fishmen qualities ever stand out when it comes to his eyes being a beautiful royal blue the other lies perfectly fine under a black eye-patch the eye is inverted from the other being a black base with just a blue iris. Growing as a human was always to hide the fact that he was half fishman which required him to hid his “pride” which was a metallic structure only ten-inches long that was burrowed in his wrist, and the spines of the spine fish can easily decorate his arms out to six-inches which only reside on his right arm while the bill in the left, unfortunately it never took long for his anger to show what he really was, and cover would always be blown.

✘ CLOTHING: The clothing of this young marine has been set to differ from the other marines out there beginning with a simple white button up shirt from each side of his hung two sheaths which held his black Trench knives, his midsection was a simple white sash that had two black leather belts around it, along the white sash, his black cane rested easy the belts were his main transportation for other items as well as the long black cloth trench coat which reached down to his shorts, the back carried the sign of his division as the world government symbol was placed on his left arm, and on his right the sun tattoo of the fishmen. (I will always RP his clothing in every topic)

✘ SIGNATURE: His coat which carries the three symbols, Eye-patch. Glasses

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Hi hater,Bye Hater

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This crooked mind of mine got ‘em all
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-Drinking
-Swimming
-Training
-Women/sometimes
-Money
-Music
-Eating
✘ DISLIKES:
-Foolish nobles
-Fishmen slavery
-His job
-Loud people
-Disgusting food
-Being told not to drink

✘ POSTIVE TRAITS:
I've always been told that I'm Paranoid
A harsh life teaches one to be Un-trusting
Things are never as they seem, always be Observant
I'm one of those fighters who never quits I'm Persistent
My pride is in my people: Human & Fishmen Caring
✘ NEGATIVE TRAITS:
To be honest is it bad that I'm Paranoid
I love to play innocent, but I'm truly a Little devil
A man has to do all he can to protect what he wants Reckless
I try to keep those from seeing my rage and what I really am Berserk

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Von Treize, Milli (Eliza), Master

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Ciel Phantomihive & Kuroshitsuji[/font]
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✘ ITEMS: Hand wraps, leg wraps, gloves, Kunai(3), Silver flask, Silver pocket watch, Four six round revolver quick loaders: (already prepared)
✘ WEAPONS:

Twin Trench Knives: Black in color and made of fine material these two trench knives are slightly sharpened around the knuckle and have a easy going grip that may reduce shock.

.38 revolvers six rounds: Twin revolvers six rounds each sports a sleek design single action, made nearly with the same grip as the knives giving a slight shock reduction.(double if possible, and has a hammer as picture doesn’t show model with one)

Hidden blade: A blade that is attached to a black gauntlet, which houses the red sun along the top, the blade extends to six inches when fully summoned with a flick of the wrist.

Peace craft : Peace craft is an inheritance which is merely a blade neatly concealed in a cane form used mainly for the skill of the draw, the appearance resembles the picture with a overall length of three-feet and five-inches long, the handle is cloaked in tight black cloth which gives it more of a look as a children’s walking stick. The tip of the handle sports a black hard wood ball even the sheath was a solid black hardwood except for the tip which sports a metal point though it doesn’t show. The only way this blade can be used when the trigger arrow on the blade is turned the placed back in position unlocking the blade from the sheath.

✘ SKILLS:

Shadow Walk: technique soley developed by Milliardo Las Treize passed down to his son Milliardo Von Treize, using the natural speed of the fishmen as well as the haste major the user begins the Shadow walk by bouncing lightly off they're right leg. Using the right as a steering tool the left touches the ground instantly propelling the young marine in any direction. The name Shadow walk comes from the fact the user leaves no sign not even a shadow a simple blur or after image remains where the user last was. In truth Von is not running like a sailfish his speed is in a leap, his leaps can be over fifteen-feet, but after ten he becomes visible, when it comes to jumping Von can leap an astonishing twenty-feet in the air, but any further than eighteen and he becomes visible no longer a blur. The shadow walk was his natural inheritance which he uses to a point that his vision remains fast and accurate instead of tunneling.


Zero-In:An ability that was learned enduring years of abuse. By reaching a point of absolute void Von has come to understand not only his human and fishmen side, but his own sanity and balance between calm and aggressive states of his mind, un-knowingly opening pages of his thoughts unleashing the brain to a higher potential. When Zero'd- In Von's body changes by unleashing endorphins, adrenaline, and senses that enhance. The bodies natural limits become slightly distorted giving his reflexes a almost unhuman boost, yet in this state of mind ones loss of control easily sends Von into a beserker mindset when used correctly his body while feeling the limits allows him to bend them without piling damage. When he comes out of his zero-in state his bodies natural reaction is releasing the spines from his body thus using his passive ability to control his own body temperature to cool the body.








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[Andri Kaiser III]

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[Miles]

welcome to BNB. Just a few things to clear up before we can get you accepted.

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• I'm not entirely sure about the half-fishman/half-human composition, but I will expect you to roleplay it accordingly. You will only get a very small fraction of the abilities that a fishman could do, considering you are a hybrid; and if I am to assume right, human blood would taint the fishman blood that he also has.
  
  
• First of all, your physical description is NOT the place to try and stick abilities in. As for the spines - no. You will not get movable spines that are razor sharp and six inches in length. You are only half fishman and that's pushing the limit for a full fledged one, let alone someone who is a hybrid.
  
  
• The grammar in your physical description is poor. We need you to write facts, not as if it was a RP itself. Your sentences are run-ons (the first 'paragraph' had no periods on it - it was literally one huge sentence) and there are coding errors as well as a plethora of grammar. Please fix these.
  
  
• What symbols does he have on his coat? Be descriptive.
  
  
• Being un-trusting isn't a positive trait at all; it's rather hindering to a character's development and interactions. Please change this.
  
  
• Explain how he is 'berserk'. That is generally a word that describes extreme, bloodlust-esque rage - and unless your character was a psychopathic killer, I doubt he would eve go "berserk". Being quick to get angry (hot-headed) is totally different than being berserk.
  
  
• Describe the quick loader he has as a wepaon.
  
  
• You have too many wepaons - the 15 kunai is fine I suppose, but then you have an assortment of other small weapons (trench knives, chain dagger, gun, hidden blade, and then a sword itself). Remove some, if you'd please.
  
  
• You can't just give a picture link for your weapons, especially since not everyone may know what a trench knife looks like. Please give descriptions for them all; especially your swords. For the swords, we will need more detail such as length.
  
  
• .. No, just no. No flammable sword. And if your sword is a cane sword, please state this besides in the description.
  
  
• Reduce the height on shadow walk. His father may have been a fishman, but he is only part-fishman, which makes him unable to produce as many feats as a full blooded one would be capable of doing so.
  
  
• Zero-In is pushing the limits of godmod and un-originality. Not to be rude, but it seems.. extremely cheap. Please, change this entire ability; I can not trust that you will RP his 'berserk' mode accurately and it's extremely hard to moderate techniques like this due to how open-ended they are.

The main things that need to be fixed would be grammar and spelling and reduction of character strength. You seem to not only view your character as semi-invincible, but with one capable of doing whatever full fishman could do, despite ihm being only part himself.

When you are finished making your edits, please respond back here saying so. Thank you.

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